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I don't stand a chance.

That's what I thought while I was
          climbing the stairs to the seduction scene.

Same time you're thinking
                "I can't seriously distress her."

Pushing the door, I'm all mechanical flutters for your masochistic stutters.
You turn slowly, smiling.
      You're smiling.. but there are tears in your eyes.
How was I to know that you could still get to me?
                    
You stitch my lips shut so my jaw won't drop.
No "are you ready's".
It's just unstitch and no promises.
                      Dropping breaths and picking up you
                                 "Hey Black Lungs"
                      take your last drag on your cigarette.
       
       "We're playing with fire sweetheart"
       "Save regrets for later"
My blood heats but my veins are filled to capacity with misery.
Because I know there's nothing to it.
I'm so busy playing despondent that I cant figure out that you're just as attached as I am.
                   See
                   what happens when you feel sorry for yourself?
I'm composed of missed details.
Leaving me thinking
                                         "You're picking my heartbeats apart
                                          killing me like its some kind of science."
                                          When you're really killing yourself too.
         
Well, send the paramedics 'cause
this falling star just hit rock bottom.
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Roo-kie Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2007
Minus the 'we hate each other' line....this is a lot of something I did yesterday.

Something I probably shouldn't have done, but I'll Save regrets for later





:heart:
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2007
:heart:

thank you much
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Roo-kie Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2007
:heart: You're very welcome.

I was wondering if you'd mind me putting up a poem influenced by your style? I'd give you credit, and even link to the poems that inspired me most ^.^
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2007
i don't mind at all

:)
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Roo-kie Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2007
[link]
Here it is, if you'd like to read it.
Thank you so very much. This inspiration from your work has given me what I think is the best poem I've ever written.
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:iconrequiemforanightmare:
this falling star just hit rock bottom <3
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2005
:heart:
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SoundsOfSorrow Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2005   Writer
take your last drag on your cigarette.
"We're playing with fire sweetheart"
"Save regrets for later"
so awesomely tied together.

your writing=the shit.
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2005
thnx!:)
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loversareliars Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2005
i like this one.
lol.






p.s. this is gillian.
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2005
thanks!:heart:
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momentarily-yours Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005
OMG jocelyn I love this as much as I love you, you deep jocy you deep :heart: ....
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005
lol, love you too brittny!! :heart:
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:iconxxxfearofperfectionx:
so

how about we trade brains for like..two days. and all i will do is write poetry and you can like..skateboard and ...do random things

i like that idea


because

your amazing
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
:blowkiss:Oooh thanks for the nice comment!
i suck at skateboarding, so deal :handshake:
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00BleedingMascara00 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
so beautiful
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
thank you! :w00t:
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xparis-in-flames Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
god you're emo. haha nice...;)
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
lol, thanks for faving it!! =D
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Farblade Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
That's very deep... its a wonderful poem.
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
Thanks so much!! :heart:
and by the way, thanks for the :+fav: on "developing a taste for the water"
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fallen-heights Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
bloody brilliant, absolutely love this piece, my fave part was

'we hate eachother, but we're both just looking to have a good time,so...'
I'm so busy playing despondent that I cant figure out that you're just as attached as i am.
See what happens when you feel sorry for yourself?
i'm composed of missed details.
Leaving me thinking
"you're picking my heartbeats apart.
killing me like its some kind of science."
When you're really killing yourself too.
Well, send the paramedics 'cause
this falling star just hit rock bottom.

this whole bit is amazing but i love the bit where you say 'you're picking my heartbeats apart.killing me like its some kind of science'
just awesome.
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
Wow, thnks so much !! And thanks for the fav, it means a lot! <333
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fallen-heights Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
pleasure is all mine i assure you.
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
"you're picking my heartbeats apart.killing me like its some kind of science."
You stitch my lips shut so my jaw won't drop.
Pushing the door, I'm all mechanical flutters for your masochistic stutters.

jeeez girl i love it.
I must have skipped the poetic gene in my family.
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
thanks so much for the :+fav:!!
oh shut up, you got the poetic AND picture gene !!
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silentscreams357 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005   Photographer
oh my gosh. i love it. the whole thing is awesome.!!!=)
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
Thank you!!

:heart:
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haven-spear Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
I'm all mechanical flutters for your masochistic stutters.
You turn me on. :)

:heart: Brian
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2005
lol thnx!! =D
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