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You, my best side, walked out.

I kicked the golden-yellow flowers aside and followed you.

"Hey Ed Mcmahon-
This isn't funny."

The trees and the rocks look ostentatious.

Hide in the eyrie with the birds.

The chirping, the songs; play a part in the carefree facade.

(I bought you a yellow jacket. I hope your eyes will sting as much as mine now.)

They said my feelings on this are just : washed out.

"When it rains, it pours. You can't hold on."

Cumulous clouds will shower on me, because that's the way I am.

My only vice is I'm not living life.

(You don't like me anyway)

You turned around and said

"I don't know what made you so overcast, but you are."

I know, and I'm in on it.

It was always a black cloud: we just never saw it.
©2006-2009 ~yournotagoodbye
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~black-pen:iconblack-pen: May 6, 2006, 9:19:17 PM
Wow Miss Jocelyn (oh excuse me, insert the nickname onlyLindsay calls you.) This is pretty super complex, but I am an idiot. I like it though, nontheless. I really like how you kinda have your point hidden in a theme of metaphors and symalys {fine I can't spell} and just your style itself. It's really a lot more interesting to read that way (wishing I could write my poetry in a secret.)

--
[There's Promise in a Pill]
~yournotagoodbye:iconyournotagoodbye: May 6, 2006, 9:27:17 PM
thank you ashley:heart:
(it means a l o t )!

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i smile to direct his attention from the rest of this sinking ship.
~SubduedPromises:iconSubduedPromises: May 6, 2006, 10:19:04 PM
:wow: :heart:
Take my heart Jocelyn.
You won me over...even if youre my cousin. :bucktooth:

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:halfliquid: from a girl inside a ghost town
~FrogCess:iconFrogCess: May 7, 2006, 4:20:32 AM
You write in amazing style. You've got a way of bringing your words on a level I sometimes find scary.
Scary in a good way ^^

You've got this thing with words, it makes me Smile. How you can fold them into a story so perfect, so hurtfull and still so true...

(I don't know what I attend to say, but it's just Gorgeous)

:heart:

--
Sometimes,, I wish I was Little again
Skinned knees are so much easier to fix
than Broken Hearts..
*turbopat:iconturbopat: May 7, 2006, 1:13:53 PM
I like how random this is. It all pulls together somehow.

Plus this line made me laugh:

(I bought you a yellow jacket. I hope your eyes will sting as much as mine now.)

Nice work.

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Don't question it...:faq:
~Purpl3Sky:iconPurpl3Sky: May 7, 2006, 6:16:33 PM
i love how you describe
love.

--
acid goes to your head;

ecstasy goes to your heart

Peace&Love
:kitty: :peace: :heart:
~Raevnn:iconRaevnn: May 8, 2006, 5:01:55 AM
stunning - you captured this emotion perfectly. :)
=haven-spear:iconhaven-spear: May 9, 2006, 6:36:48 PM
Love the transition into the rain references. :) Some really nice lines, even if it's not your best.
~yournotagoodbye:iconyournotagoodbye: May 13, 2006, 2:54:15 PM
:hug:thanks so much.

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i smile to direct his attention from the rest of this sinking ship.
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